

Maybe try cutting the usage down to about half. The word "game" was used a lot in the lead's second paragraph.It may be best to find a way of trimming it down. A general comment here: the lead is quite large, even compared to the size of the article itself and the lead for Bloodlines.Rawr" Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 23:17, 24 October 2015 (UTC) Comments from ProtoDrake Of course if you disagree, remember that "I'm a mighty thesaurus. The article is as detailed as can be, with a beefy development section developed with some very generous help from producer David Mullich who corresponded with myself to help clarify things and even provide information in future interviews that I was then able to use as a reliable source! It's thoroughly sourced, well laid out with a bevy of images to compliment the prose, and I believe the article is close to as perfect as it can be. This article is about one of the greatest RPG games of all time, featuring a level of choice and consequence rarely replicated, and with a loyal fan base that has added content to the game for over a decade.

Vampire: The Masquerade – Bloodlines Nominator(s): Darkwarriorblake / SEXY ACTION TALK PAGE! 23:17, 24 October 2015 (UTC)
